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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the rise of globalisation, migration is a popular choice for working adults all over the world. A large number of
people
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 hold the belief that professionals like engineers and doctors should
work
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 in the
country
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 where they received their professional training.
Others
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 hold a more liberal perspective that they are free to
work
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 in a different place if
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 what they desire.
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 I agree with the more liberal perspective,
this
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 short essay discusses both points of
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, the notion that professionals should practice in the
country
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 of their training is completely understandable as training institutions often tailor their materials and experiences to cater towards local needs. There is a famous saying about
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, "When in Rome, do as the Romans do." In my educational background
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 instance, all the materials and practicums I have undergone in Hong Kong are mostly relevant to Hong Kong; hiring agencies in other nations will have requirements and expectations different from what I am used to. Another reason why
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 may share
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 notion is because of the resources involved. The spot that I occupy at the local institution gave me plenty of opportunities to
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 with other
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grassroots
 organisations. If I move abroad, all of these would go to waste.
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, my overseas experience during service tours and immersion semester shows me that different countries have different ways of handling similar circumstances so I may need to learn the ropes again when I move abroad.
On the other hand
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, I still believe that we should be free to
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 in a place of our choice. Humans value autonomy the most
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 of the day, which contributes significantly to our happiness and
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 the quality and quantity of the
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 we produce. Limiting where we are allowed to
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 may make us unhappy
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 occupying jobs that other
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 will be more than willing to take.
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, we can always return to the
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 where we gained our knowledge and skills after working for some time abroad. That will
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 us to bring innovative ideas to the local industry and help the economy flourish
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 than would have been feasible previously. Most importantly, we should learn to make personal and professional decisions without letting
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 influence us because they are not the ones in charge of our lives.
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, there are various reasons why
people
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 may argue that we should
work
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 in the
country
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 where we studied and why
others
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 would counterargue
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 belief. I personally think that we deserve the liberty to choose where to
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 because these decisions influence our personal lives which is ultimately our responsibility and not up to
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 to speak on.

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task achievement
Providing even more relevant examples can greatly enhance the support for your arguments. The examples you have are good, but perhaps one or two more specific instances can further strengthen your points.
coherence cohesion
Consider using more varied connectors and cohesive devices to link your paragraphs and sentences. Your writing is generally smooth, but a greater variety can add nuance and sophistication.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear and compelling introduction which outlines the main points and your personal stance very effectively.
task achievement
You have successfully presented both sides of the argument, which demonstrates a balanced and comprehensive task response.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively wraps up the discussion and clearly states your personal viewpoint, providing a satisfactory end to the essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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