Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
With the rise of globalisation, migration is a popular choice for working adults all over the world. A large number of
people
hold the belief that professionals like engineers and doctors should work
in the country
where they received their professional training. Others
hold a more liberal perspective that they are free to work
in a different place if that is
what they desire. While
I agree with the more liberal perspective, this
short essay discusses both points of views
.
Fix the agreement mistake
view
Firstly
, the notion that professionals should practice in the country
of their training is completely understandable as training institutions often tailor their materials and experiences to cater towards local needs. There is a famous saying about this
, "When in Rome, do as the Romans do." In my educational background for
instance, all the materials and practicums I have undergone in Hong Kong are mostly relevant to Hong Kong; hiring agencies in other nations will have requirements and expectations different from what I am used to. Another reason why Add the comma(s)
, for
people
may share this
notion is because of the resources involved. The spot that I occupy at the local institution gave me plenty of opportunities to work
with other grassroot
organisations. If I move abroad, all of these would go to waste. Correct your spelling
grassroots
Moreover
, my overseas experience during service tours and immersion semester shows me that different countries have different ways of handling similar circumstances so I may need to learn the ropes again when I move abroad.
On the other hand
, I still believe that we should be free to work
in a place of our choice. Humans value autonomy the most at the end
of the day, which contributes significantly to our happiness and consequently
the quality and quantity of the work
we produce. Limiting where we are allowed to work
may make us unhappy while
occupying jobs that other people
will be more than willing to take. Furthermore
, we can always return to the country
where we gained our knowledge and skills after working for some time abroad. That will allows
us to bring innovative ideas to the local industry and help the economy flourish Change the verb form
allow
further
than would have been feasible previously. Most importantly, we should learn to make personal and professional decisions without letting others
influence us because they are not the ones in charge of our lives.
To conclude
, there are various reasons why people
may argue that we should work
in the country
where we studied and why others
would counterargue this
belief. I personally think that we deserve the liberty to choose where to work
because these decisions influence our personal lives which is ultimately our responsibility and not up to others
to speak on.Submitted by asllchkied on
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task achievement
Providing even more relevant examples can greatly enhance the support for your arguments. The examples you have are good, but perhaps one or two more specific instances can further strengthen your points.
coherence cohesion
Consider using more varied connectors and cohesive devices to link your paragraphs and sentences. Your writing is generally smooth, but a greater variety can add nuance and sophistication.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear and compelling introduction which outlines the main points and your personal stance very effectively.
task achievement
You have successfully presented both sides of the argument, which demonstrates a balanced and comprehensive task response.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively wraps up the discussion and clearly states your personal viewpoint, providing a satisfactory end to the essay.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.