Some people think that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Advertisements have become an important part of our life and they influence us to buy things that are sometimes useful but most times unnecessary. Some say that they don't notice them as it's become so regular. In the paragraphs below I will explain both sides and state my opinion.

First

of all, it's safe to say that commercials rule our life every day. They drive our major decision-making process in buying commodities. They

also

teach us about different products and competitors available in the market and persuade us by converting our wants to needs.

This

is a major marketing gimmick that common people don't realise and that's how the big companies make money. Some advertisements

also

use emotional appeal

thus

making customers fall prey to their products. There are

also

a few brands that use big stars like Shah Rukh Khan or Amitabh Bachchan to endorse their brand

thus

giving fake credibility to the customers. On contrary, there are a few people who say that don't give any attention to the commercials that they see as it's become so common.

Although

this

might be true to a certain extent where we tend to ignore a regular or known advertisement, it is unavoidable for us to not notice new ones especially in

this

technology era where ads are displayed based on what you speak.

For example

, Instagram or Google uses voice recognition without the user's knowledge and they suggest commercials based on your conversation. So in my opinion, I would 100% agree that advertisements are extremely persuasive and it is definitely not possible for us to ignore them completely as they subconsciously decide our purchase behaviour and

that is

how they mint money from the consumers.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

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285 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people think that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

The current trend in education is to move away from traditional exams and instead have continuous assignments over the school year. What do you think of this trend?

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Training for work is far more important than providing a broad-based education. You should use your own ideas and experience and support your argument with examples.

Formal exams are used to assess students at the end of each semester in many countries. Why are these exams used by schools and universities? What other types of assessment are possible?