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Many beleive that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in countryside? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#beleive #city #life #countryside
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Every
people
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 has
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a dream
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dream
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dreams
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 to live in a big
city
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 as it provides better life.
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, it is sometimes thought there are more advantages to live in
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city
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the city
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 rather than
rular
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regular
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 area. In my opinion, I considered that
the
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life in a
city
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 is much better, but the life in
countryside
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the countryside
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 should not be neglected. There are many reasons why
people
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 prefer to live in
metropolitian
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metropolitan
areas
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. The
first
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 and foremost important thing is that it
give
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gives
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 all
facilities
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. The transportation system is very good. It
have
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has
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 all types of
trasportations
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transportations
transportation
such
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 as trains, buses and trams.
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, the medical
facilities
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 are
also
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 available with
advance
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advanced
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 technology and
it
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they
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 have all
necessary
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the necessary
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equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 for surgery. The Children are more educated in cities as they have
quality
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the quality
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of
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educations.
hence
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, there are abundant
facilities
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 in the
city
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. Another point to consider to live in a big
city
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 means
people
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 have more
entertainments
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entertainment
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.
people
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 can go
at
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to
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the theater
a theater
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theater
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theatre
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 to watch movies.
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, they
also
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 have
differents
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different
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 types of
night clubs
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nightclubs
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 where they can enjoy
a
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apply
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dance and
a music
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music
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.
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,
the
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in the
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 one survey has conducted in the Uk,
people
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 who live in
metropolitian
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metropolitan
areas
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they
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apply
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have more options for
enjoyments
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enjoyment
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 compared to
people
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 who live in
regioal
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regional
areas
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.
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,
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city
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the city
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 has immense benefits.
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, countryside
areas
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 have
also
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their own
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own
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owned
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 importance.
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,
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people
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,people
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 who want
calm
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a calm
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 and peaceful atmosphere
they
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apply
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choose to live there.
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, villages have more greenery in
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comparison
comaparison
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the comaparison
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of
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to
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 cities.
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,
people
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 get fresh air and they do not have to face health
prblems
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problems
problem
. In conclusion,
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city
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the city
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offer
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offers
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tremandous
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tremendous
 benefits because it has all
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the advance
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advance
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advanced
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 technology and essential tools to give all
facilities
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. While
,
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apply
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 countryside area can
also
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provides
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provide
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 basic necessities.
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