Some people believe that it is a good idea that older people continue to work if it is possible for them to do. Do you agree or disagree ?
Sometimes older does not mean expired.The
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,who gain after doing something with long applied knowledge.some Correct your spelling
experience
individrals
argue that Correct your spelling
individuals
its
is better to Change the pronoun
it
prolongs
senior citizens carry out his Change the verb
prolong
work
if they get chance.However
,i
am in agreement with Change the capitalization
I
this
if they have opportunities to keep continue work
.to illiustrate
that.to motivate Correct your spelling
illustrate
new comer
and share Correct your spelling
newcomer
exprienced
in Correct your spelling
experienced
respective
areas.I shall Correct pronoun usage
their respective
intends
to explain my opinion following paragraphs.
To commence with,in every Change the verb form
intend
nations
get a certain Change to a singular noun
nation
periods
for a person, who works for Correct the article-noun agreement
period
goverments
in Correct your spelling
governments
government
specific
area.after Add an article
a specific
certain
time they get Add an article
a certain
retirement
.however
most Add a comma
,however
of
Change preposition
apply
retired
people spend time without doing any Add an article
the retired
work
except reading books or newspaper
even they have vest ideas on Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
such
a department where needs master person.for instance
,a teachter
of economies after Correct your spelling
teacher
him
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his
retirement
he
can Correct pronoun usage
apply
able
to teach to the student.Add a missing verb
be able
Therefore
,evenafter
his Correct your spelling
even after
retirement
relevent
department ought to provide an opportunity to carry on teaching and they will Correct your spelling
relevant
able
motivate to the new teachers ,who Add a missing verb
be able
joints
in the departments recently
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joint
In addition
,A goverment
high official, who Correct your spelling
government
work
as a secretary at the secretariat and he has vest ideas in the area where he Change the verb form
works
do
the Change the verb form
does
work
.for example
, A local goverment
secretary who have huge knowledge Correct your spelling
government
in
the Change preposition
of
administation
in a country.Correct your spelling
administration
Moreover
,after Correct pronoun usage
his
him
Add a comma
,him
retirement
Correct your spelling
government
goverment
should employ him newly to get his Correct article usage
the goverment
exprience
for enduring administrative works.
To summarise,it would be really great if we utilize the Correct your spelling
experience
exprienced
of our senior citizen, who get retired with a huge practical mastery.Correct your spelling
experienced
experience
furthermore
, in this
way goverment
will be beneficial by utilizing their Correct your spelling
government
expriences
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experiences
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