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Some people believe that it is a good idea that older people continue to work if it is possible for them to do. Do you agree or disagree ?

#people #idea #work
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experience
,who gain after doing something with long applied knowledge.some
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individuals
 argue that
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 is better to
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senior citizens carry out his
work
 if they get chance.
However
,
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 am in agreement with
this
 if they have opportunities to keep continue
work
.to
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illustrate
 that.to motivate
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newcomer
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 and share
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experienced
 in
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 areas.I shall
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 to explain my opinion following paragraphs. To commence with,in every
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 get a certain
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 for a person, who works for
goverments
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governments
government
 in
specific
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 area.after
certain
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 time they get
retirement
.
however
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 most
of
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retired
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the retired
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 people spend time without doing any
work
 except reading books or
newspaper
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 even they have vest ideas on
such
 a department where needs master person.
for instance
,a
teachter
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teacher
 of economies after
him
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his
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retirement
he
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can
able
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be able
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 to teach to the student.
Therefore
,
evenafter
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even after
 his
retirement
relevent
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relevant
 department ought to provide an opportunity to carry on teaching and they will
able
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 motivate to the new teachers ,who
joints
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 in the departments recently
In addition
,A
goverment
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government
 high official, who
work
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works
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 as a secretary at the secretariat and he has vest ideas in the area where he
do
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does
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 the
work
.
for example
, A local
goverment
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government
 secretary who have huge knowledge
in
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of
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 the
administation
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administration
 in a country.
Moreover
,after
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his
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him
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,him
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retirement
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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 should employ him newly to get his
exprience
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experience
 for enduring administrative works. To summarise,it would be really great if we utilize the
exprienced
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experienced
experience
 of our senior citizen, who get retired with a huge practical mastery.
furthermore
, in
this
 way
goverment
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government
 will be beneficial by utilizing their
expriences
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experiences
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