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Many believe that the best way to ensure a happier society is to reduce the difference in income earnings between the rich and poor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#society #difference #income #earnings
The difference in income
of
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between
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rich
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the rich
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 and the poor is huge and significant.Many believe that the reduction in
this
 difference is the best way to ensure a happier
society
.I strongly agree with
this
 and explain my opinion
further
 in the essay. Happiness is related to healthy living and proper education which can only be achieved by
money
. Some basic necessities of life like
house
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the house
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 to live
, food
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 to eat and clothes to wear can be possible only
by
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with
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money
. These days,
poor
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the poor
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 rarely have
money
 for all the basic necessities that
lead
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leading
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 to poor mental and physical health,increased illiteracy and crime rate. For a peaceful and happy
society
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 poor people must get sufficient
money
 for basic needs either through government or through rich
bussinessman
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businessman
,by providing employment and by increasing their daily wages.Ultimately, if there is sufficient food,healthcare and education for
poor
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the poor
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 there will be less discrimination in
the
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apply
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society
. In conclusion,I agree that reducing the difference in income of rich and poor will lead to happy and peaceful
society
.
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