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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good memebers of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #children #memebers #society #school #place
The bar graph illustrates, the different age groups of
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 individuals, who are donating the amount
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 various trusts or orphanages in 1990 and 2010. Units of measurements are
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percentages
. Overall, the greater percentage of
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 donated in1990 than in 2010 except
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 who are above 50 years old. It is
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 that elder
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 are donated more for the trusts in 2010. In 1990, Approximately 42% of
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 are contributed to charities, and it is highest in the whole chart.
In contrast
, only around 17% of youngsters are donated. In 2010 these percentages are significantly dropped to 24% and 7% respectively.
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 who are aged from 51-65 their donations are rose in 2010 with 39% and which is 4% greater than in 1990 . The
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Societal norms
  • Role models
  • Foundation
  • Family values
  • Ethics
  • Habits
  • Responsibilities
  • Structured environment
  • Diversity
  • Cooperation
  • Respect
  • Civic education
  • Social skills
  • Integration
  • Guidance
  • Harmonious cooperation
  • Optimizes
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