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Some students tend to travel after finishing school and spend time working somewhere instead of going to the university directly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? (May 2021) Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Exploring new places will be really important for every individual. Few high school youngsters are very interested to go on vacations and
also
, doing some internships or part-time jobs compared to admitting into some colleges soon after finishing their school studies In
this
 essay, will discuss both merits and demerits of the above statement giving a few instances.
Firstly
, Nowadays, people are started travelling and exploring new places especially young
students
,
this
 trend was really started way back in the 17th century and people who are from western countries more tend to visit new locations across other continents slowly,
this
 trend is passed on to the other middle-east countries. The main advantage for
students
 who travel more is they will experience different cultures, cuisines, and lifestyles. Some other new generation
students
 are
also
 taking up some part-time jobs in private organisations. By
this
, they will meet many people during their internship and
students
 will gain industry knowledge which will be really helpful for their future endeavours
For example
, A high school student after completing his 12th standard
thereafter
, immediately applied for freelancing jobs through an employment portal. Soon after sending the application to a digital marketing company, they accept and is hired as a marketing associate. During 3 months temporary job the young student dealt with many customers and resolved their issues on time.
This
 job experience helped to crack many competitive exams after university studies.
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