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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit students at the school. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is often argued by some educationalists that exchange visits will benefit
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, whilst others disagree with
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 premise. While
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 does offer a few advantages we cannot ignore the drawbacks that it raises. While
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 helps
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 get a better understanding of life in other countries, it
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 creates a sense of loneliness and homesickness amongst them. There are a couple of main benefits arising out of
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 programs. Some of which is the ability to meet new people and be introduced to a new language.
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, sophomores will be subject to educational diversity which is important, as it shows them where they are in the grand scheme of things. Alternately, travelling alone to another country, all be it with fellow
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 for a long duration, can result in loneliness for some
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, which would thereby manifest itself by dropping grades. Studying in an international location can bring up unwanted expenses which not all families can afford.
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, many
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 may not like the sudden change in culture and language and may find it hard to adapt to a new place.
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, teenagers are at an age where they want to try and experience anything and everything new, which is a good thing.
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, in doing so, it can sometimes have devastating consequences, so they need to be constantly monitored, which is difficult for parents to do if their children are on an international exchange visit. In conclusion, I feel the advantages of an international exchange visit outweigh the disadvantages, because if we can get teenagers to think from a global perspective,
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 they will tend to show more responsibility and maturity when dealing with situations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educationalists
  • international exchange visits
  • global awareness
  • linguistic diversity
  • self-reliance
  • globalized world
  • professional trajectories
  • prohibitive
  • cultural shock
  • adaptation challenges
  • academic disruption
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