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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued by one school of thought that if
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 will disappear from the world the life will become easy because the
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essential.
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, I totally distinguish with
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 notion. Because I think that if there will not be a variety of
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importance of that particular culture.
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,
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 is one of the most important identifications of any culture. It gives a
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 of uniqueness in different cultural societies. In my view, if there is no
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, there is no culture, because
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 about the
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, there were several civilizations in Pakistan who lost their identity as they lost their
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such
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Harappa
 or Mohen jo Dharro.
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,
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ability
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 to learn, explore and interact with various
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. If there will be fewer
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 in the world
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 will not expose diversified
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 and they will get bored by interacting in the same
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.
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Netflix.
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 it is a Korean show
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,
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 are watching it. It is
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human psychology that
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 gets attracted to new things and have
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the ability
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 to experience them. In a nutshell,
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a variety
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a variety
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 of cultures.
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 to explore new things will be diminished.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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