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In order to be successful in sport, some people think you have to be physically strong. Others say that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many famous athletes are strong mentally and physically. Some
people
 think physical is more important than mental, whereas some think strong mentally is the most vital. In my opinion, I strongly believe
both
 of them are required to succeed in the sport.
This
 essay will elucidate
both
 views and the following examples will be provided to support my point of view. On the one hand, some
people
 believe that strong physical strength is the significant factor to succeed in the sport pathway.
This
 is because ideally of most
people
 think sporters need to use a lot of energy and power to overcome all obstacles in-
game
 the
game
.
For instance
, according to the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, it has been revealed that 80% of football sports fans in Thailand league 2021 believe that having not a strong enough body of players is the reason for losing in the
game
.
Therefore
, physical strength tends to be an outstanding reason to have achievement.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe that the mind is more important than the physical.
This
 is because ,in the real
game
, there are many factors to overcome
such
 as audiences, environment, weather and emotions,
thus
 a strong mind is very important.
For instance
, in recent news, it has been shown that the interview of the volleyball Thai women's team in the Olympic
game
 tended to say that they had heavy pressure from the audiences in the final
game
, so
this
 was the one factor to get lost in that
game
.
However
, in my opinion, I think
both
 are important because ,without the strong mentality, the sportsman or sportswoman would not control their emotions well in the
game
, which there are many pressures to overcome and
also
 if they are not healthy physically, they will not compete with another team. In conclusion, I strongly believe the successful sportsperson should have
both
 strengths mentally and physically in order to control the
game
 in the proper way toward the winner.
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