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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. Do you agree with this statement.

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Some people
Believe
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believe
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 that reading improves
language
skills
 and creativity, whereas watching
television
impact
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impacts
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 very little on these abilities.
This
 essay will argue that
books
 play a dominant role in advancing our
language
 and imagination
skills
 for several reasons.
To begin
,
books
 can improve every individual personality trait,
this
 can be counted as the most advantage of reading book. When
ones
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one
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 make
this
 a habit, he or she begins to imagine things in real life, which are written in the
books
. Reading novels and characters readers’ imagination power in various ways, unlike the
television
 which displays images in front of the viewers and do not give them enough time to think of what they watch. Another reason is reading help sharpen
the
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language
skills
. People can enrich their vocabulary and learn a new sentence structure.
Also
, by doing a lot of reading, people will get used to seeing proper grammar, formal languages and new collocations,
therefore
 it will increasingly improve the reader's
language
 capabilities. Even though, it is true that
television
 is more visual than
books
, so that it is more interesting and understandable, but it cannot be carried anywhere.
Therefore
, due to
the
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the portability of the book
the portability of the books
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books
 portability, they are prior to televisions
acquire
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acquiring
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language
skills
. In conclusion, reading has more positive impacts on human’s creative thinking and
language
skills
instead
 of watching
television
.
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