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Many parents these days work in other countries, taking their families with them. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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Nowadays there is a tendency that many
parents
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 working in abroad while taking their
families
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 with them. From my perspective, I think the positive points of
this
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 trend surpass its negative aspects. I will elaborate on my point of view below. On the one hand,
parents
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 working in a foreign
country
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 and taking their
families
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 with them can reduce their sense of homesick. When people working in other countries would miss their family members , especially when
parents
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 working in foreign countries they would miss their children a lot, and at the same time, their children would
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 miss their
parents
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 a lot. So that sometimes both
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 and their children can not concentrate on their
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 or study, and easily feel depressed, it would lead some mistakes in their workplace and school , due to they feel homesick, so in order to concentrate on their
work
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 or study, and reduce their homesick feelings,
parents
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 taking their family with them while working is a good choice.
On the other hand
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, when
parents
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work
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 and take their family with them have some demerits aspects . At
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 their family members would not adapt to that new
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 .They may face many
problems
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,
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 as language barriers and
culture
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 shocks in that countries.
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,when their
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 went
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, and they can not communicate with local people, they may feel bored, and
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 due to they do not understand new
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's
culture
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, sometimes may face a lot of embarrassing things.
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, they would have inadaptable
problems
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 in that new
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 .
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, I believe that at
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 their
families
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 may encounter some
problems
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 and can not adapt to that new
country
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, as long as they would put effort into learning
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country
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's language, and
culture
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, they would definitely understand the
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's
culture
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 and communicate with local people,
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 they would make many friends in that
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, and would love to live in that
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. All things considered,
although
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parents
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 taking their
families
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 to a new
country
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,while they working there would face many
problems
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, if they put effort into learning
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country
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's language and
culture
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, they would overcome those difficulties and adapt to a new environment,
therefore
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,I think
this
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 trend has more advantages than disadvantages.
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