New parents should attend parenting classes to learn how to bring up their children well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, people have different views about whether
classes
related to parenting ought to be attended by newly married couples or not. I think
although
almost every new parent should visit
such
classes
, it is still unimportant for every new
parents
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to take part in
classes
concerning parenting. On the one hand, when
parents
attend special courses on how to take care of their child, the tension that might have been because of the lack of knowledge gets replaced by clarifications. More importantly, it can be very convenient for new
parents
to be able to ask certain
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and get the answers they need; as the information they obtain will help them
next
time they face the problem.
For example
, for
parents
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it can be really difficult to choose a proper punishment when their kid is guilty, at parenting
classes
they would be given
a proper advice
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that suits
on
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the certain
misbehavior
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.
Consequently
, better results are likely to be achieved as long as
parents
face any sort of child closely linked with
this
issue.
On the other hand
, for a potentially large number of ,
parents
it is very time-consuming to visit
such
courses since new
parents
do have
lack
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of time to dedicate to
classes
associated with parenting.
This
means that the addition of a baby to a family highly demands new responsibilities as well as time-consuming actions.
For instance
,
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new born
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baby has no stable sleep schedule in order that
parents
cannot make a proper plan in prior let alone visit parenting
classes
that take no less than an hour.
Therefore
, courses based on parenting are barely an adequate option for all members of families due to
hectic
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schedule
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related to a baby. In conclusion, I believe even though it is essential for new
parents
to obtain specialized help when they need one, it is not a necessity for all families to do so.
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