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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think that this will lead to English becoming the only langusge to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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In today`s advanced world it is generally claimed that knowing English discloses
enermous
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enormous
opportunity
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opportunities
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 around the world. Since, technology, communication and worldwide stuff turn to
this
language
.
Such
 globalization
accured
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accrued
 due to the fact of
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convenience
 that could benefit to the population.
However
, does it affect
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motivation to learn
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new languages?
This
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pros
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prons
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pros
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 and cons of speaking in one
language
 in the world and put forward
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several
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pieces of evidences
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evidences
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. The predominant factor is the
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easiness
 and equalness. The spoken and written
language
 will provide
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a chance
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 to
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comprehend
 each other regardless
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 the nation, race or gender.
For instance
, If a person
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 to the abroad country, there will be no need to learn those
place`s
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language
 in order to communicate, to be understandable or to be like "own person" so that, it will ease the
proccess
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process
 of
traveling
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. Whereas from the other hand, going to another country without actual knowledge can threaten with
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 lack of understanding
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 culture. Because one of main
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transmission
 tool to introduce deep treasure of the nation is a
language
. As
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illustration
 could be
loosing
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 motivation from the side of foreigners. According to
research
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 of
scientist
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scientists
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 written
on
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 "the Times", it is proved that main reason of learning
language
 is to live an abroad.
However
, if everybody spoke
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the same
language
,
then
 the desire would go away. In
concusion
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conclusion
concussion
, the relief and comfort are the benefits for that
reasins
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reason
reasons
 many people prefer to choose one prominent
language
 rather than differentiation.
Although
, there would be an excellent advantage to
those society
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that society
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 who apart from learning global means of communication, preserve
own
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their own
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language
 as well.
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