Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for health and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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life
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nutrients amount in their daily diet. Some
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that there is no need to worry about it because healthy meal and daily exercise
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not crucial while others have a contrast opinion about it. I support, from my view that dietary food and
everday
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everyday
workout are mandatory to living a prosperous
life
.
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my stance with
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First
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are two main ideas which substantiate my statement.
First
, nowadays people are running behind
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and money. They
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much importance to what going in their
life
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For example
, to save
time
majority of workers
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junk foods from outside
vendours
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vendors
which is purely
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unhygienic
hygienic
.
Secondly
, They did not schedule some
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physical activity in their daily routine.
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, they are working
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without rest to earn more money. Eventually, because of
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reasons
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they will end up in
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sedentary
sedendary
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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.
As a
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they are
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high risk of major health complications
such
as cardiac arrest.
Moreover
, in recent times there are plenty of fake advertisements and false promises
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this
condition more worst. Some business organizations
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non verified
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and unproven
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to cover their customers.
Consumors
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Consumers
are believing their words without thought.
For instance
, companies selling some food items that will give energy
such
as coke and
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.
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Simultaneously
they are concealing the
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of carbohydrates in it which
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dangerous to our body system.
Additionally
, some retailers
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that if you drink or eat our product within a week you will
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five kilograms which is
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untrue and unsafe method Because without exercise we can not lose
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. To conclude, From my perspective, I believe that
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diet and exercises are essential in our
life
. without a doubt, it will keep physically fit and mentally stable.
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