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Some people think the qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world can't be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Everyone wants to be a successful
person
 in
life
 and one can become a successful
person
 by possessing good qualities. There has always been a debate on the quality of education that
universities
 provide and additional
skills
 that hone a
person
's behaviour to become successful. I strongly agree that
universities
 or similar academic institutions are not enough to achieve qualities to become a successful
person
 in today's world. The schools or colleges are great resources to master
skills
 in studies.
However
, many more
qulities
Correct your spelling
qualities
 and abilities are needed as well that help
people
 to become successful in
life
. Some of these qualities are professional
skills
,
people
 management, financial planning, dealing with various stakeholders, taking charge of the time and being a better decision-maker. These
skills
 are not being taught in
universities
 and these are the real
skills
 that help each one of us to become a successful
person
. We have to acquire these abilities as we grow personally and professionally in our
life
 to sustain ourselves in today's competitive world. There are many personalities like Lary Page and Mark Zukerberg who have not been to renowned educational institutions but they have become extremely successful in their lives. Having said that, academic institutions are the foundation to build knowledge of various subjects in us.
Hence
, it helps us to understand which stream we are interested in and what profession we can select to continue to work and become masters in that profession.
However
, the
skills
 that we learn outside the academy are much more helpful for us to become successful in
life
 than the information and
skills
 that we learn from the
universities
. To summarise, external growth boosts us to reach the stage in
life
 where we can see ourselves a successful
people
.
Hence
, we should not be only dependent on the
universities
, but
also
 experience the challenges in
life
 that give us
real
Add a hyphen
real-life
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life
 lessons to become successful
people
.
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