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Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. But others think taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In each of the
person
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's
life
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 sport is very important. Some use
sports
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 for their physical exercise and some prefer it as entertainment. There are some people who believe that the
sports
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 played in the teams, like football have more
benefits
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 than the individual sport, like swimming. According to
me
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, both are useful but
team
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sports
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 can have some more
benefits
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. On the one hand, individual
sports
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 are useful for just a particular
person
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 and that
person
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 needs to be alerted
for
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 everything happening in the
game
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 as there will not be any type of
support
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.
For example
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, in swimming, the sportsman takes participation in the
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 and he will have to
support
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 himself in bad times. They will have to take some important decisions,
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 factors will ​be very much beneficial for their entire
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.
In addition
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 to it, There are no types of betrayal in the
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 as compared to the
team
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.
This
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 is beneficial for the athletes as betrayal becomes an exception and they can fully focus on the
game
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.
On the other hand
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, in
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sport
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 all the athletes play as a
team
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 and they have to think as a
team
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.
This
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 boosts up the power
such
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 as teamwork, negotiation and so on which are beneficial for the
person
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 in real
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. The
team
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 will
also
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 provide some emotional
support
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 to the individual
team
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 members when there are worst times in the
game
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.
For instance
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, in football, if a member of the
team
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 needs to change the plan and the strategy
then
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 he has to discuss and negotiate with the whole
team
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 and if
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things
does
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 not work according to the plan athletes will provide emotional
support
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 to each other. To sum up, in my
opinion
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 the
benefits
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 of individual
sports
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 and
team
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sports
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 are mostly the same, but
team
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sports
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 have some additional
benefits
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 which are very useful over the whole
life
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.
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