Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. But others think taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In each of the
person
's
life
sport is very important. Some use
sports
for their physical exercise and some prefer it as entertainment. There are some people who believe that the
sports
played in the teams, like football have more
benefits
than the individual sport, like swimming. According to
me
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, both are useful but
team
sports
can have some more
benefits
. On the one hand, individual
sports
are useful for just a particular
person
and that
person
needs to be alerted
for
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everything happening in the
game
as there will not be any type of
support
.
For example
, in swimming, the sportsman takes participation in the
game
and he will have to
support
himself in bad times. They will have to take some important decisions,
such
factors will ​be very much beneficial for their entire
life
.
In addition
to it, There are no types of betrayal in the
game
as compared to the
team
.
This
is beneficial for the athletes as betrayal becomes an exception and they can fully focus on the
game
.
On the other hand
, in
team
sport
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all the athletes play as a
team
and they have to think as a
team
.
This
boosts up the power
such
as teamwork, negotiation and so on which are beneficial for the
person
in real
life
. The
team
will
also
provide some emotional
support
to the individual
team
members when there are worst times in the
game
.
For instance
, in football, if a member of the
team
needs to change the plan and the strategy
then
he has to discuss and negotiate with the whole
team
and if
the
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things
does
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do
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not work according to the plan athletes will provide emotional
support
to each other. To sum up, in my
opinion
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the
benefits
of individual
sports
and
team
sports
are mostly the same, but
team
sports
have some additional
benefits
which are very useful over the whole
life
.
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