Crime is a problem all over the world, many people believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

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Every country is facing criminals and they are

also

finding different ways to decrease the

crime

rate

. Enhancement in

technology

has made it possible.

Although

, it is sometimes thought advances in

technology

have made the

crime

rate

less in comparison to the past. In my opinion, I considered that

technology

has become an indispensable part of our life and it is very useful to decline the

crime

rate

. There are several reasons why the

crime

rate

is declining by using

technology

. The

first

and foremost important thing is that

technology

has given a lot of facilities to catch criminals.

For example

, security cameras are available everywhere so thieves can not think about stealing anything, and

people

feel safe and secure.

Moreover

, every

people

prefer to install a security alarm in their house, so if anyone can

tries

Change the verb form

try

show examples

to enter into the house alarm will ring.

Therefore

, there are many helpful elements that are provided by

technology

to reduce

crime

. Another point to consider is that more crimes happen to get

money

from someone else as they have no income source.

For instance

, in a survey has conducted in the UK, If

people

earn good

money

to fulfil their dreams, they never will think about theft.

In addition

technology

gives more employment opportunities to humans.

Hence

, more jobs are

also

reasons to remove the

crime

rates.

On the other hand

, there are

also

some negative effects of

technology

Firstly

people

use plastic

money

when they have online purchases that time some hackers hack their card details, and

people

lost their

money

from the online account.

Secondly

, sometimes social accounts are

also

hacked and

people

lost their privacy. In conclusion,

crime

rates have lessened as more

people

have employment and some

people

have fear to catch by police as tighten security around them, but some drawbacks should not neglect

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crime prevention
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community engagement
deterrent
rehabilitation
reintegration
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socio-economic development
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employment opportunities
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