the maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development

the maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development
Overall
,
it is clear that
the plan is to extend the
centre
and its car park into nearby green space to allow for more stores and a greater focus on
fashin
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fashion
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at the expense of eateries and space for activities. Currently, southside
mall
consists of only a supermarket, department store,
cenima
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cinema
, a noodle shop, café with a children’s play area, and toilet facilities. To the east of the
centre
, there is a golf course that backs on the park,
while
the
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south, there is a fitness
centre
and a carpark opposite the
mall
entrance
According to
the proposal, only the supermarket, toilets, and entrance will remain
from
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the original site. The most significant development will be the extension of the
mall
in an easterly direction, where it will overtake land previously occupied by the golf course and park. The fitness
centre
too will be demolished to make way for the carpark which will more than double in size. Inside, the
mall
itself,
although
the proposed renovation will allow for more stores, including fashion boutiques and shoe stores, the department store will remain, increasing in size and acquiring its own entrance. A cosmetics and gift shop will be added,
as well as
, a beauty salon. There will,
however
, be nowhere to eat as plans show the café will become an information
centre
.
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