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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and age together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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There is an argument about despite, all of the positive emotional benefits of
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 there is a social advantage either. It means that it's a beneficial way to make
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 of all the cultures and nations with different generations closer. I strongly agree with
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 statement because of the reasons which might be explained in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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 is the only common language between
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 from all around the world. Everyone might recognize some sorts of rhythms and beats. They can feel the emotion of
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.
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 most
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 cannot understand the language of
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, they all can feel it and that song might touch their soul. For ,example there is a Kurdish singer called Nasser Razzazi who is Really famous all around the world because of not only his peaceful voice but
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 the professional rhythm and incredible tune of traditional instrument's voice in his songs.
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, there are some kinds of
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 which show the tradition, culture and lifestyle of an area.
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, listeners would find out about them and know that city or country much better.
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, there are some local songs about the history there or the different happenings which
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 have experienced there. As an example, there is an Iranian singer who had sung a piece of
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 about 8 years war in 1990 in most of the cities of there.
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,
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 from other countries can learn something about the epic history of Iran. In conclusion,
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 can feel the feeling of a completely strange song in another language. ,
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 they can gather several pieces of information about that area. I believe that
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 connects all the world together and it's an awesome way for recognizing other traditions.
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