In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
governments
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want to tax certain types of
food
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due to the number of
people
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with
health
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issues are becoming more common. I wholeheartedly agree with
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statement, and
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essay will explain the reasons why authorities should difficult the access
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fast
food
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.
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of all,
people
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prefer fast
food
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because is fast and cheap. Usually,
people
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goes
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to
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place when they do not have time enough to eat. Mc Donalds and Burger King are good examples of how these places offer prompt hot meals in a good fair deal. Clearly,
people
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see these restaurants as a good deal.
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, a good meal is composed
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of
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carbohydrates, proteins, and
fiber
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, but the options in these restaurants are quite different with more sugar, grass and chemicals.
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, the number of
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with
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related to fast
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has increased in a way that
governments
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need to
interfer
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interfere
.
Governments
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already have many programs to educate the population about
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kind of
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, but it looks not enough because more and more
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are becoming obese.
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,
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is time
to
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for to
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authorities
interfer
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interfere
more and create new taxes to difficult
people
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to
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apply
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go eating fast
food
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as they do with alcoholic drinks.
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, if the restaurants decide to sell a soda with
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a cheeseburger
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, the price could be double just to not encourage
people
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to buy again.
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,
people
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will not consume in
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way that could damage the
health
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of their bodies. To conclude, fast
food
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has
brung
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brought
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more problems to our
health
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, and even though
people
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know all the issues to their
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, they are still consuming because is fast and cheap.
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,
governments
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could increase the taxes so in
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way
less
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people
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will
want
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eat
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type of
food
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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