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You have recently heard that a friend of yours has had some problems as a result of some unusual weather. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -express concern (i.e. say you are sorry to hear what has happened) -tell them about a similar experience that you once had -give some advice or offer help

#friend #weather #-express #concern #e #-tell #-give #advice #offer
Dear John, I hope you are doing well. I’m writing
this
 letter to you because our friend James has told me about what happened to you because of the flood in your
city
last
 week. I’m very sad since John told me that your house has gone in the flood. And
first
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thing
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think
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thing
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came
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that came
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 to my mind is to ask about you and your family, thank God that you
all
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have all
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 been outside the
city
. Do you remember the hurricane which
taken
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took
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 place in my
city
before
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apply
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two months ?. it’s really hard to face something like that and it caused us a lot of issues and
to
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too
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 many people as well. Can I give you a piece of advice?. Try to find another home in the main
city
 which is much better located and
containing
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contains
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 more amenities. I know some there who can offer you
affordable
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an affordable
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home
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homes
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. Take your time to think and please don’t hesitate to contact me anytime. Hope to hear from you soon . Fahd
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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