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In some countries, citizens must pay a lot of money in taxes, but education and healthcare are free.

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Introduction
Now in 21 century, Many
people
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 in the world try to avoid paying taxes, but
on the other hand
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, schools and hospitals are not free and can not avoid.
However
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, taxpayers always have the opportunity to Access free scholarships,
healthcare
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 and help the
country
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 develop faster. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss that health is the most important thing for the
country
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 in allocating national
education
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 and health, and why do we need these essential factors for free.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, the free
scholarship
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 can be helpful for that student who does not have
money
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 to pay for the high-level
education
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 school, the low-income households can study and have university degrees without paying anything,
for instance
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, my parents don'
t
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 have enough
money
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 to pay my college in Canada, but in our
country
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, the
education
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 we can use the
scholarship
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 to discount the payment,
Although
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 is not fully
scholarship
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.
However
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, it is still beneficial for those
people
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 that don'
t
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 have enough
money
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.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, Everyone needs
healthcare
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 no matter which
country
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 you live in, but in some of the nations it is free, so it is beneficial for those
people
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 that doesn'
t
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 have
money
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 to pay; as all, we know if you get sick and without
healthcare
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 that would be heavy financial care for each person or family, for an example, in Taiwan, if you are getting sick you don'
t
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 need to pay when you go hospital not even do the surgery because the national government are already pay it for you. Still, in the meantime, we are facing significant medical financial problems because too many
people
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 abuse it. Some of them go to the hospital, but they're not even really ill.
Conclusion
In conclusion, many
people
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 support that the
education
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scholarship
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 and
healthcare
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 for free is a significant advantage to most citizens.
However
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, it could be a hole for national financial issues if everyone had good
education
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 and health, they would be working hard, so it is essential and imperative. Hopefully, one day the human nation could achieve a truly Utopia.

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