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The mass media, including television, radio and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
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 as television, radio and newspapers are very influential in shaping people's ideas. I completely agree with
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 opinion and will substantiate my reasoning during
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 essay. For starters, all 3
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 outlets provide up-to-date local as well as international
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 means that they have the viewer's trust to provide accurate and factual information because before
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 details are shared with the public, they go through a thorough screening and various editing processes.
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 is why they have earned the public's trust. An example of
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 can be seen through the BBC and CNN networks and other various
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 channels.
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, the drawback of social
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, is that content can be uploaded onto the web by anyone under the false pretext of verified
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, which could skew a potential reader's impression about a certain topic. Unfortunately,
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 is a common trend happening on many social websites. An instance of
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 can be seen with the current pandemic, where people can be seen posting untrue particulars regarding the virus, which others believe. In conclusion, I believe that mass
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 has a great influence on our daily lives and thereby feel they have a responsibility to ensure that they report unbiased and unprejudiced
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 to their viewers so that the public can make their assessments on a particular topic.
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, I feel that social
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 outlets
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 as Facebook and Instagram, have a moral responsibility to ensure that any content posted on their sites must be fact-checked to ensure validity.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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