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Your local council is planning to hold an election to choose members from the society but there are no young people on the council and you think that the council needs young people's views. You are thinking of standing for election. Write a letter to the head of the council. In your letter, state why you want to be elected mention why you think you would be a good candidate describe your qualities, skills, experience, interests, if any

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Respected Council leader, I am Ram and I live near 11 Colts Avenue. Recently, I heard that our local council is planning for an election to elect members of our society.
This
 letter is to express my interest in standing for an upcoming election to represent younger people, as currently there is no representation for them in our council. I am currently working as a professor in one of the highly reputed colleges in the city for the past 5 years. I am a master's major both in psychology and maths. My key motivation is to provide a good education and a safe environment for our society's younger people. I do a lot of community service during my free time by teaching orphanage kids maths and providing them tips for their mental well-being.
Similarly
, I believe that I can do justice for
this
 position by promoting
such
 habits to young people in our society as well. I believe my skillset might be of interest to you. Looking forward to a response from you soon. Yours sincerely Ram
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coherence cohesion
While the letter is well-structured, adding a small introduction to explain the reason why having young people's views on the council is important could offer a stronger context for your candidacy.
task achievement
To achieve a higher score, ensure any claims made are strongly supported by specific examples. This adds to the credibility and thoroughness of your response.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear logical structure from expressing interest to detailing qualifications and experiences, making it easy to follow.
task achievement
The use of formal tone throughout the letter is appropriate given the context of the communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Youth representation
  • Diverse perspectives
  • Innovative solutions
  • Generational gap
  • Community development
  • Local governance
  • Volunteer experiences
  • Forward-thinking
  • Adaptability
  • Civic engagement
  • Public service
  • Community projects
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Local businesses
  • Communication skills
  • Leadership qualities
  • Technological proficiency
  • Problem-solving
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