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With growing population in cities, more and more people live in a home with small or no outdoor areas. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Population growth and society are moving to city areas are controversial topics, which has crucial effects on everyone’s lifestyle. Because of
this
, most people tend to live in apartments or flats with a lack of outdoor spaces. In
this
, I am going to discuss on pros and cons of
this
 and I am going to provide my personal opinion as well. On one hand, if you are single, living in the city area for your employment you may not able to afford too much for a
house
. In
this
 regard, living in a small
house
 or a flat is worthwhile rather than being in a landed-
house
. Other than that, it is convenient to clean a small
house
 if you are living alone since, with your busy schedule, you may need to spend more time on cleaning or you might need to pay for a cleaning service weekly.
However
, there are benefits of living in a landed
house
 with outdoor space for a family with kids.
Firstly
, it will reduce your stress and relax your mind after a busy day of work if you can enjoy the environment.
Also
, if kids can spend outdoor most of the time, it will boost their immune system. Other than that, accidents can happen when living in flats or storied-houses,
such
 as lifts that were installed to reach the ground floor can be stuck. To conclude, my opinion is even though we have some advantages when living in a small flat without outdoor space, there are more benefits in living in a landed-
house
 for your mind as well as for your family.
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