Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your opinion.

Man-made activities impacted
plants
and
animals
in a terrible way around the globe. Some would say that
this
activity cannot be deterred,
while
others are of the opinion that
humans
can save these precious
habitats
by action.
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point and will discuss that, despite the intense competition for natural resources, as a global crisis, the UN can regulate how
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natural resources can be utilized. It is often debated that
humans
did not pay attention to the
habitats
of omnivores.
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humans
are in a race to obtain natural resources from places where they grow and live to boost their economy and prosperity;
however
,
this
activity causes the extinction of these species all over the Earth.
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, Total Company has started to excavate in Amazon forests for fuel, and it is paying huge money
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the Brazilian government that no one can stop them. I believe we should love our mother nature, and worldly things should not deceive us to damage our ecosystem. People surely have the power to take action and stop
destruction
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of
plants
and
animals
habitats
;
moreover
, behind all
animals
and
plants
there is a
God
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wisdom, and these species are for the goodness of
humans
, with
the
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being said every one of us is obliged to protect them. As a global crisis, the regulatory organization can play a crucial role in enacting roles and announcing these places as
save
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zones, and nobody can have activity there.
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, the UNEP organization can call on all humanity to save the danger of extinction of
animals
and
plants
in their surroundings. I believe, as life beings, everyone is responsible
to protect
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the ecosystem from any discrimination where they live. In conclusion, some people find the change very hard to stop their negative impact on the ecosystem, which consists of
plants
and
animals
,
while
others are defendants of the environment and
animals
, and they
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everyone to do their best and be responsible against the
habitats
of
plants
and
animals
. I believe every single human has a responsibility to contribute and foster
the
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place for omnivores.
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Work on improving the logical flow between your paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next and that all points are clearly connected.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are effective in presenting the main topic and summarizing your arguments clearly.
task achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, showcasing your ability to discuss multiple perspectives.

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