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Some believe that advances in technology are increasing the gap between rich and poor while others think the opposite is happening. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Technology
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 has advanced in leaps and bounds around the world. Some believe it has increased
rich-poor
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the rich-poor
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 gap in
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society
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, one reason for it is
loss
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 of income due to
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the replacement
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 of workers by advanced
machines
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 .While others are of the opinion that
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the gap
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 is decreasing due to increased job opportunities provided by company Apps .In my opinion,
technology
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 has decreased the distance between the upper and lower class.
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technology
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 is responsible for bringing
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society
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 closer. On one hand ,newly launched
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 are increasingly replacing the human workforce .These
machines
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 are making life easier and are designed to decrease the physical workload .
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,they are functioned to work non-stop without breaks,effectively leading to job
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 and
loss
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 of pay for the workers.
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,according to a survey, the installation of ATM
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 in the banks led to
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the unemployment
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 of 25% of its employees.
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, lack of jobs in their field of expertise led to
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a financial
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 crunch,forcing these workers to
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take up
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 menial tasks .
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,replacing the employees with technically advanced
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 widened the rift between the rich and poor.
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,
technology
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 is responsible for bringing
people
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 of all classes on one common platform.More employment opportunities are generated by the organisations,who develop Apps and train
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,providing them
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 opportunity to learn and earn .
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,Uber company ties up with local auto drivers and provide technical training to them.
This
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 knowledge gained during the training sessions enabled the auto drivers to earn more income than what was earned previously and
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 make them tech-savvy.These are the reasons how the social gap is slowly
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decreasing
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deceasing
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decreasing
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. To conclude,
technology
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 has made great progress in
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modern
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.
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 technically
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 are responsible for
loss
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 of income to poor
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;
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, in my
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 proper utilization of
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technology
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 has provided more job opportunities,higher pay to poor
people
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 slowly elevating their status in
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society
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advances in technology
  • gap between rich and poor
  • economic inequality
  • access to technology
  • competitive edge
  • job displacement
  • automation
  • impoverished areas
  • technological innovations
  • new job opportunities
  • internet connectivity
  • access to information
  • empower
  • educate
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • mobile banking
  • financial inclusion
  • education technology
  • equal learning opportunities
  • exacerbate
  • alleviate
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