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Some people say that in all levels of education too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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For one to be fully equipped for the world today, we have to spend quality time in
school
 depending on one's course of study. Some have argued that we dwell more on academics in schools than the required knowledge we need to thrive in our day to day activities. I strongly agree with
this
 view because our current schooling system has more breadth than depth.
To begin
 with, More and more
students
 are not getting the relevant skill they require to succeed in their daily endeavours.
This
 is because the current academic syllabus is fashioned in a way that promotes retention
instead
 of expression. Many
students
 only go to
school
 to memorise facts, most of which are not applicable in the labour markets and as ,
such
 they become irrelevant in their area of the chosen career.
For example
, The Nigerian Labour guild has said that most of the graduates produced by our higher institutions in recent years do not have the qualities that employers are looking for.
This
 is simply because most of what they have thought were irrelevant theories without practical skill.
Furthermore
, providing practical skills for learners make it easier for them to integrate into society seamlessly because they can add to the system. These days,
students
 have to search for other sources of knowledge to complement that which has been thought in the universities.
For instance
,
Students
 who studied computer science while in
school
 have to learn extra skills
such
 as programming, coding and the likes, for them to be gainfully employed.
This
 won't be necessary if our schools spend ample time in proving
students
 with the necessary know-how
instead
 of teaching them the history of the computer. As
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 conclude, there are lots of topics in our current
school
 system which are not relevant in the current dispensation. We need to get rid of them so that we can spend more time on more practical skills that will make
students
 thrive.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasize
  • detracts
  • proficiency
  • underrepresented
  • curricula
  • employability
  • workforce
  • technology-driven
  • creativity
  • problem-solving
  • theoretical
  • practical application
  • evolve
  • prioritizing
  • societal
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