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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more isolated Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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With the advent of the
internet
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,
people
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 can easily and quickly contact their
friends
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. Some
people
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 argue that
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 advance help
people
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 tie closer, while
others
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 claim that it
seperates
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separates
 human society. In my opinion, I agree with the
first
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 statement due to the convenience of the
internet
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 and the popularity of its access tools.
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 of all, some
people
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 think that the
internet
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 makes a more
closer
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 society.
This
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 is because
people
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 can timely read their
friends
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' stories
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 on social media, which
people
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 can receive up-to-date information from their
friends
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.
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, youngsters are crazy about social media
such
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 as
facebook
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 or
instagram
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Instagram
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, and most of them frequently use these platforms to share their status and hilarious videos
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others
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.
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, these users become intimate because they have common topics to discuss, which was
time consuming
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 to achieve in the past when gathering together was the only measure to do so.
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,
others
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 hold the view that it
seperates
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separates
 society and makes individuals more unfamiliar.
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 idea is
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 by the fact that
people
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 spend too much time on the
internet
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 and have
less
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fewer
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 social activities with their
friends
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.
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, it is undeniable that most adolescents are addicted to
use
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 their smartphones for watching Youtube channels and online movies and TV series even when they have a meal with
others
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. As a consequence, they seldom talk to each other, which can dent their relationships. In conclusion, while some
people
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 are worried that the
internet
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 will make
people
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 more isolated due to smartphone addiction,
others
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 believe that it ties
people
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 closer due to its instant sharing of information. From my point of view, thanks to the convenience of the
internet
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 and its ability
of sharing
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to share
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 interesting stories quickly,
people
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 become more intimate.
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