Some people think that being born to a poor country is a bad luck while others believe that it only helps fuel one’s aspirations to succeed. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People have different views about being bred in poor nations. While many argue that it is unfortunate, I personally believe it can be motivation
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people achieve success. On the one hand, being born in poor countries is unlucky because the quality of life in these places is lower than it is in rich ones.
Firstly
, families in poor nations may not be able to afford education for their children.
Consequently
, many living in poverty are unable to attend school, and those who do tend to miss school more often.
Furthermore
, diseases are common for residents in poor countries. A lot of patients in Africa,
for instance
, died since they lack the resources
such
as machines or doctors to treat
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virus.
However
, I would agree with those who believe that having the origin of poor nations can motivate a person to succeed.
Poor
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condition of living can make citizens feel a sense of frustration. If they want to escape
this
situation, they will need to change.
For example
, Ho Chi Minh, who was born in
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country, VietNam, had
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decision to lead Viet Nam to be
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and become a developing nation.
In addition
, poor condition familiarizes men with
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a hard
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way of living since things never come to them the easy way.
Therefore
, they do not mind hard work and try to
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their ambition. In conclusion,
although
there are some reasons why it is unlucky to be born in poor countries, in my
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it can promote people to achievement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Limited access
  • Education
  • Healthcare
  • Basic amenities
  • Infrastructure
  • Poverty
  • Unemployment
  • Personal growth
  • Development
  • Cycle of poverty
  • Motivation
  • Challenges
  • Life conditions
  • Resilience
  • Determination
  • Hard work
  • Success
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Solutions
  • Positive impact
  • Community
  • Difficulties
  • Equal opportunities
  • International support
  • Aid
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