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"Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?".

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Nowadays the
internet
 is essential for most of our assignments
also
 the vast majority of students use the
internet
 for their educational purposes. They can discover a lot of information and essays on the
internet
 ,
however
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 some people believe that we are getting too much dependent on the
internet
 and it affects children. In my opinion, we have to adapt ourselves to the new technologies and become more productive and use
this
 opportunity to improve our knowledge and enhance our literacy and it doesn’t matter if we should sacrifice some of the traditional skills,
for example
, handwriting skills because by artificial intelligent in computers, we don't need to cautious about grammar and dictation, it auto-correct them spontaneously.
However
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 the
internet
 has some downsides too. there are a lot of websites that are full of false information or man webs that consist of sexual activities. We have to be aware that our children don’t involve in
this
 mess,
thus
, we must teach them about the hassles of using the
internet
. Another drawback is online video games, many pupils prefer to play video games
instead
 of studying their lessons or they need to participate in the social environment and interact with each other to learn how to communicate with people in the future but, they spent so much of their time on online video games. in conclusion,
although
, the
internet
 has some disadvantages I think the benefits outweigh the downsides and we can monitor our children activities and teach them about the dangers of the
internet
 and how to avoid them
also
 manage their leisure time with outdoor tasks.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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