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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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An increasing density of people in the whole world contributes to ecological degradation and a high risk of a large-scale disaster
such
 as a pandemic.
For instance
, to cope with decreasing air’s quality humanity can apply advanced smart systems. Whereas fast-spreading diseases might be less if the government restricts the lively communication between people. One of the biggest problems is air pollution which results from at least driving cars by an enormous number of people. Nowadays, many automobiles are based on oil engine which has gas wastes. One of the possible solutions to increasing car pollution is installing a recycling system on the city’s streets.
Such
 devices can be realized because cutting-edge technologies allow us to analyze the air’s quality and control the cleanness.
However
, the more effective way to deal with
this
 problem is using electric cars. Unlikely,
such
 transport is not still popular due to the expensive production.
Thus
, a government in well-developed economical countries might provide citizens with filters on the streets.
Moreover
, the purchase of an electric vehicle is the best option to take care of the environment by every person. Another issue is appearing rare dangerous viruses. It is a quite complicated problem that does not have an obvious solution because modern medicine still could not predict the result of interaction between some chemicals and the human’s organism.
Consequently
, human beings should reduce offline meetings, real communication and arranging crowded events. It can be realized by the government that introduces the laws. To be more exact, all cafes and public places can be closed, all classes can be online.
In addition
, for breaking the laws citizens must pay a big fine. In spite of strict rules, every person can stay at home.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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