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The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

#government #sciences #subjects #country #progress
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Ever since the technological epoch took place, it is considered that the progression of any nation majorly relies on how many
science
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-based resources a country has.
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, a proposal of investing more capital on mainstream
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 than art
subjects
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 is put forwarded which in my perspective appears superficially attractive, though, in
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 pursuit, other
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 ought not to be overlooked. It is indubitable that by assimilating the knowledge of
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 any region would become self-sufficient. As scientific innovations contribute to progress in the field of medical
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 and even in space exploration, if a budget is allocated on providing
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-related education, the prospect of a country’s development opens up. In long run, highly educated citizens would accelerate the growth by not only providing the services to the public but
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 by making discoveries. An example of
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 could be taken from the outbreak of covid-19 when developed Nations because of their advanced know-how of
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 became able to control the rage of
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 pandemic by innovating vaccines at the right time. Had developing Nations acquired
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 knowledge, their situation would not get worse.
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 the above discussion makes it appealing to subsidize
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subjects
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 relatively more than other
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, the significance of art in the holistic development of the human mind cannot be neglected. Since, school curriculum, more often than not, supports rote learning, a major focus on academic
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 may halt psychological growth and may restrict learners to be creative and imaginative. An article of ‘The Hindus’,
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,
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 suggested that 8 out of 10
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 students lack creativity while encountering any real-life situation. Apart from
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, inculcation of art and craft gives opportunity to the pupils to broaden their horizon before chasing their career, apparently giving birth to many singers, dancers and painters.
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, these should be
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 equally addressed in an educational setting. To conclude, it can be asserted that
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 of providing higher financial support to mainstream
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 which no doubt is a prerequisite for a country’s development, equivalent importance needs to be given to other
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 so that individuals do not have to limit themselves to only one area.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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