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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

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Nowadays, there are plenty of
students
 who choose and go for studying abroad and it is being popular in many cities. My viewpoint is that having higher
education
 across the sea has pros and cons and it will be discussed below. On the one hand, there are a number of merits that people can obtain from abroad studying.
Firstly
, seeking a university overseas is popular among the youngsters and it has a great influence
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 society.
For example
, if one
study
 out of the
country
 and graduate higher
education
 they could be appreciated more than other
students
 who
study
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country
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.
Second
, the level of
education
 is much better than in countries where there are no high qualified tutors, and
that is
 why people are started to choose
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 abroad. As an example, those who
study
 overseas
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will have more opportunities to find a job since they get
better
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education
 than others.
On the other hand
, the possible demerits of gaining educational knowledge should not be overlooked. Studying abroad is good but in
reality
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 it is so complicated because of
rules
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 of other
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 especially now due to covid-19.
Students
 are facing
with
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many difficulties in their studies.
For instance
, my friend who studies in the USA had
problem
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 with their embassy. They said that he should have had two shots of vaccine before entering their
country
otherwise
 he will be ejected from studying.
Furthermore
, getting
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 abroad is not affordable for all.
Therefore
, not all
students
 are able to go for learning overseas and unfortunately, the government subsidize schools
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poor
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 educated tutors and
that is
 the reason why learners leave their home countries. To conclude, many
students
 are looking for universities
in
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overseas where they can
study
 and get higher
education
 and
demands
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 of
this
 is growing fast. In my opinion, gaining high
education
 have equally pros and cons and the best way is to give
opportunity
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 for
students
 to
study
 both
in
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country
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the country
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 and out of
country
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the country
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then
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students
 will have more experience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Specialized courses
  • Personal growth
  • Financial strain
  • Tuition
  • Cultural differences
  • Isolation
  • Homesickness
  • Educational systems
  • Academic performance
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