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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centers, while others prefer local markets. What are the advantages of each? Share your opinion and any personal experience in your answer.

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Deciding where to shop will always remain
one
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 of the difficult choices.
One
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 may opt to shop in a shopping centre. In my opinion shopping in shopping
centres
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 are more advantageous, than in local markets.
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 is solely due to the fact that they provide more quality products and other perks when compared to a local market.
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, when it comes to purchasing in shopping
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, I believe customers are more brand and quality conscious. To add on, customers are well received in a shopping centre and are provided with
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excellent customer service. As a buyer,
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 gets exposure to varied collections according to their interest. Though it might cost an arm and a leg, people are ready to invest in a product
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 worth every penny they spend on it.
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, the portion of the public that prefers shopping
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 are the
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's, who are least interested in bargaining. Apart from the quality, they
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 address the warranty and other consumer benefits when the purchase is made. A personal experience of mine is that, when I bought a Jean in a shopping centre and when I found it was damaged, I was able to exchange it for a good
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 swiftly. The same scenario in a local market can be quite a disappointment
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 when the item cannot be exchanged.
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 to conclude, shopping
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 give the public more options and choices than a local market does. They
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 provide a satisfying customer experience which makes it seamless for the customers.
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