Some people say that the best way to imporve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others , however say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays,health is one of the important factors in society.A small number of public suggesting that

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more features and equipment to do exercise be an as healthy while, another public asking to find out different methods rather than practise use with machinery.In my opinion, game facilities are essential for fitness but need to be implemented other ways to keep our energy for long life.

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current scenario,youngsters are choosing

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to workout

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in the gym to get a healthy body since the features

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by machines are helping to reduce weight as fast and can train in the proper way.

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,it helps to keep continuity to do exercise on

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in a place were filled with useful items.

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, in Kerala, most of the adults are inquisitive to obtain a strong body with six packs to impress others and

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couple of years.Even girls

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like to spend

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in the gym to get

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shape and reduce belly fat.

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concept is adopted by youngsters around the world since the features are

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better strength.

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,several public opted for other ways to maintain well-being since they think that workout in a gym is

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of occasion and which would not help to stand as strong in terms of mentally and physically.

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, they like to go for yoga and other meditations to become physical as good.Another group of people are

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about their food which helps them to keep as strong

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of going for an exercise since the lack of hygienic food causes to make unhealthy.There

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another number of families

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like to spend more money in a workout place and they have taken

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to stand as healthy in public. In conclusion,getting a healthy body

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with equipment or supplementary products will be detrimental to

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rather than practise to do meditation or yoga and

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fresh food on

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will give more health for long life. The government should implement a system to educate about being a healthy human always.

rahul.gauri00

Nov 20, 2021

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