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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or dosagree with this statement?

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Using
railways
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 is becoming increasingly popular in many nations. According to some people, it is better for the government to invest more in
railways
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 than roads infrastructure. I completely agree with
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 opinion due to the following reasons. There are people who believe that the benefits of travelling by train are more environmentally friendly.
Trains
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 burn less fuel than cars and it could help with greenhouse gas reduction. One study suggests that carbon emissions for rail are less than any other form of
transport
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. It is possible to say that using rail is making a personal contribution to minimising the impact on our environment. When contrasting motor
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 with rail, external costs, noise, air pollution and congestion are far lower on
trains
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 than using a private car. A
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 advantage of using
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 is that the railway is the safest mode of
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. To be more precise,
trains
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 ride on the
railways
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,
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 means that there are no other vehicles travelling on their way.
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, the chances of accidents and breakdowns of
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 are minimum as compared to other types of
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.
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, the traffic can be protected from exposure to sun, rain and snow. By improving the railway, the government provides a safe system and
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 will encourage people to use
trains
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 for transportation more, which will result in a decrease in the accident rate in the nations. In conclusion, it seems to me that the government should be responsible for spending money on
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 of road infrastructure because it is more benefits
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 as safety and environmental safe.
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