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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development

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In recent years, advertisement massages intend to convince that the goods are new productions of the company. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reason for
this
 selling method and I think that it is negative progress.
First
 of all, due to the high competition in attracting consumers, companies try to make their advertisement more appealing to the public via representing the new product, which is varied from the previous ones.
Besides
, people would purchase the
good
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goods
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, which they find
it
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special and
therefore
 the more the ads seem different from its similar products the probability of the victory is higher.
For instance
, the new Samsung mobile is shown with a bending feature, which was uncommon between other brands.
Furthermore
, an excessive emphasise on new innovation might cause a reverse development. If a material has
a
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popularity among the nation
then
 manufacturing a new replacement might not be an acceptable idea within the market. In
this
 case, with the new introduction, the brand might lose its loyal consumers, which were used to
buy
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 the old one.
Hence
, the profitability, which is the real aim of
this
 alternation is going to fail the desired outcomes.
For example
, iPhone 13 could not face the predictable sale since people were still satisfied with the preceding one. In conclusion, businesses want to increase their revenue via emphasising modern products in order to boost their profits,
however
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 I believe that
this
 action might display drawback in progress because of the widespread utilization of the old product.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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