Recent research suggests that the majority of criminals who are sent to prison commit crimes after they are released. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem?

Numerous studies
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proved that the majority of convicts return to
prison
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time after the release. In my opinion, the main reasons for that are social and psychological, while the solution could be only provided by the
government
. People who decide to violate the law usually have a number of common
charecteristics
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characteristics
that persist even after the end of the
prison
sentence.
Criminals
tend to have little
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formal education,
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are frequently unemployed
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and have mental issues. Those
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characteristics
together with the criminal record significantly limit the individuals' ability to find a decent job and start making living in a legal way.
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society
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to avoid ex-prisoners and is not very
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reciprocating
,
consequently
, the person, who has just come out of
prison
and has no money, no shelter and no prospects,
this
person has to connect with his contacts from
prison
and other
criminals
from his past as
this
kind of individuals will not avoid him. Being connected with other
criminals
while having small opportunities in life cause people to commit crimes again as it is might be the only way for them to survive and it and acceptable behaviour in their social cycle. The solution for
this
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problem
should be
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government
involvement.
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could start
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rehabilitation
programs in prisons and support convicts after the release.
For instance
, educational programs could be arranged in prisons so people could learn
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in-demand skills that they will be able to use to earn money afterwards. Psychological help is
also
very important and expensive as well, so it should be funded by the state. Many
criminals
have psychological issues and
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it is challenging for them to cope with problems, conflicts and other life events. Overcoming those issues will make convicts more
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resilient
and improve their chances for success. And
finally
,
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should provide support after the release, facilitating employment and rehabilitation. To conclude, many prisoners
reoffend
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re-offend
due to psychological and financial reasons and
government
must take decisive actions to counter
this
pattern.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recidivism
  • Rehabilitation
  • Reintegration
  • Marginalization
  • Vocational training
  • Psychological counseling
  • Sentencing laws
  • Community-based programs
  • Anti-discrimination laws
  • Employment bias
  • Probation system
  • Social stigma
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