Some people believe that young people should follow older generation’s example. Others, however, disagree and believe that it’s good to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Recent years has witnessed tremendous growth due to technological advancement.
This
has led to a huge generation gap between the young and the older generations. People born before the technological era face difficulties to keep up with
latest
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techniques
moreover
, their past experience is becoming obsolete faster. While some believe that even after
this
great revolution of technology, young and aspiring adults should still rely on the
methods
followed by past
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as it is more reliable and experienced, others argue, that challenging
these old point
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of view is a must. In my opinion, there is a risk of not achieving new results if we stick to the old
methods
hence
, it is absolutely necessary for innovation to try something new and test some old ideas which have been followed blindly.
To begin
with, Every invention was created with an idea that was beyond the traditional concept. while it is undeniable that old concepts lay as the background for all new ideas,
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it is required to challenge some old concepts to invent something new.
For Example
, After vehicles were invented, it was considered the fastest mode of transport
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several years, until
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the airplane
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airplane
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airplanes
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created. The idea of travelling through the sky which is a common
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of transportation now
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was hugely
critisized
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criticized
and deemed impossible back
then
.
Although
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Challenging an outdated idea is healthy for growth, it is important to understand the concept beforehand. Since
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these
methods
are developed over a long period of time, they can be beneficial if followed to a certain degree.
For Instance
, In the
feild
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field
of medicine, though advancements have led to finding
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a cure
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cure
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for most
of
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the
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ailments, traditional medicines are still considered natural and healthy. To conclude, Though is firmly
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that it is necessary to break the old barriers and find new techniques for growth, it is
also
much important to keep in mind some old experienced
methods
laid by our forefathers.
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