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Fast food is a part of life in many places and as a result, this leads to bad effects in lifestyle and diet. To what extent do you agree?

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In the modern world. people love to eat fast
food
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 on daily basis in their life and
as a result
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, it causes obesity and other effects on one
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 and daily activities. I completely agree with the above statement. Fast
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 has numerous drawbacks. Mainly, it affects people's digestive system which leads to obesity, anxiety, or acne problems in the human
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 and more extensive, it will cause heart problems as well.
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, eating prepackaged
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 is not recommended by doctors and nutrients too. The survey has been taken in the United States on fast
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 consumers and the result was over 80% of the total population consumes street
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 or oily
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 in their brunch and dinner, which caused obesity of 67% of that 80% of total people. Poor eating habits is the main reason for weaknesses, less productivity, and lethargicness. The human
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 needs nutrients from green vegetables and fruits which are not ingredients of street
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.
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, a healthy meal has vitamins, proteins, and carbs which gives one
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 to function human brain properly.
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, fast
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 has a completely reverse effect on the human
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 which leads to boredom, a weak brain, or laziness. Overall, it makes the human
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 less active. In fact, according to the researchers, the public who consume healthy dietary is more likely to live more, healthy, and actively compared to those who eat a fast meal on daily basis. To conclude, fast
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 or street
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 has tremendous disadvantages as they cause health problems and majorly heart disease to the human
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 it ones lifestyle is affected by poor diet as well.
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, a poor diet makes the human
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 lazy.
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