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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
Some
people
 argue that if we are vegetarian, we will live healthy and longer while other
people
 thought that
meat
 is the most important meal for our growth and metabolism. In my opinion, I prefer to eat
meat
 to get the required nutrients for our bodies. On one hand,
people
 recommend being a vegan because we can get the required nutrients from just vegetables, fruits and nuts.We don't need to eat
meat
 even we can obtain the required proteins and vitamins from vegan meals. We should be kind to animals.
For example
, in Buddhists, most of the
people
 are vegetarian and don't eat
meat
 but they can live happy and healthy.
On the other hand
, we do need to eat
meat
 to be a variety of nutrients. We can get proteins, Vitamin A and Vitamin K by eating
meat
 and fish. They
also
 encourage our growth and help to operate our body metabolism.It is right that we can get protein and other vitamins from nuts and peas, we still do need to have a diet including
meat
 because you cannot get sufficient amount from that seeds as we get from
meat
.
In addition
, u can look at the
people
 who eat only vegetables and who eat properly. You can see the differences even in physical features. In conclusion, I would to like agree to have diet properly rather than eating just only vegetables and fruits.
Although
 we should be kind to animals, there are many ways to preserve them and we should be more emphasis on our health.
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