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Vaccination of children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Children
’s
vaccinations
 have become detested among a certain portion of western culture. These people argue that
vaccinations
 are toxic to the health of their kids and as
such
are
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This
 essay will argue why vaccinating
children
 against hazardous and spreadable
diseases
 is completely needed regardless of small potential
risks
. Parents have always been cautious regarding their
children
’s health and are wary about getting them vaccinated as well. They are frightened about injecting the unknown substance into the bodies of their toddlers that have the potential to make them sick. There are some instances of
children
 that have been captured are there, unfortunately reacting adversely to these medicines. These things have increased the fear among many parents that
vaccinations
 are not entailed and can be far more dangerous than getting their
children
 other communicable
diseases
 like a cold cough.
Although
, the
risks
 associated with the
vaccinations
 are minor and can be cured after but the idea of being unnecessary and dangerous is completely preposterous. Why
vaccinations
 are crucial to a child’s health? Because many life-threatening
diseases
 have been prevented over 100 years and some of them have been eradicated around the globe.
Moreover
, the number of
children
 so far saved outweighs the number of
risks
 that come with the
vaccinations
 and
also
 outweighs the number of toddlers who died due to the fact of being affected by these spreadable
diseases
. So, the idea of
vaccinations
 being unnecessary and dangerous is ill-informed and quite absurd and can affect the country.
This
 essay argued that people who are against having their
children
 immunized against
such
diseases
 are the ones who have their thinking flawed and cannot find a solution to
this
 problem and are underestimating the
risks
 of not getting their sons or daughters protected.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Immunization
  • Preventable diseases
  • Eradicate
  • Efficacy
  • Immune system
  • Herd immunity
  • Vulnerable populations
  • Misconceptions
  • Discredited
  • Side effects
  • Child mortality
  • Global health
  • Vaccination campaigns
  • Rigorous testing
  • Public health policy
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