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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is it? What are the best ways to reduce this problem?

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Most
people
 who travel away from home for a period of time will suffer from homesickness especially at the beginning of the new journey. It is
natural
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 thing that
people
 feel homesick when they are far from home and their families. Leaving family behind especially the ones toy are responsible for will be the hardest step,
also
 the new culture and the new language will be hard too and it will make
people
 miss their home and their country.
However
, with
this
 modern world, I think it is easier to deal with homesickness, today
people
 can talk and see their families
everyday
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 and from everywhere.
Also
,
people
 who travel to
another countries
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another country
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 have to adapt themselves to the new culture and to the new environment, by doing that, they need to make and to enjoy new relationships and to learn how to communicate with new
people
. I believe that
people
 who want to live, work or study in another country should prepare themselves how to adjust to
new
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 environment and to become independent.
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 the same time, they need to learn the new language and the new culture. Of course,
people
 must make new friends and try not to be alone will make them feel better and help them think positive.
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