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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 day and age, with the advent of modern society, social platforms play a pivotal role in our daily life. It,
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, has been debatable whether social media exerts detrimental effects on both individuals and the community or not. While some
people
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 suppose that social networking sites take a toll on human life,
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I totally disagree with
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 viewpoint. I firmly believe there are a wide range of great benefits from social networking sites that have been brought to our lives On the one hand, one evident strength is that thanks to the development of social networks, so
people
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 are given more golden chances to find a job to bring home the bacon. They could make use of social networking for commercial purposes . If
people
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 don't have high qualifications, they can
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 make a living as others by using them.
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, an online seller can sell clothes or food via Facebook or Instagram to earn money. If social media doesn’t grow, it will be tough for
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 to earn money hands down, especially the unemployed or the poor. Another noticeable reason is that
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 due to social platforms
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 as Zalo, Viber, etc…,
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 could not only maintain contact with significant beloved ones when living far away but
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 keep updated with hot news both domestically and foreign.
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, social networking sites are considered
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a critical tool to enable governments to catch and prosecute animals more quickly than conventional ways. Case in point, when looking for a crime, the policeman just need to update crime’s information on Youtube, e-newspapers, or Facebook, with the fast spread of those social networks, they could easily find out crimes within some days. More importantly, it is
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 one of the best methods to help students to learn better at home with the support from Youtube, Google when they are exposed to many valuable materials to serve their learning’s demand. In conclusion,
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 some
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 think that social platforms have a considerable bearing on
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’s lives, I strongly believe that they offer lots of wonderful advantages for
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 if they know how to use them properly.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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