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Some people believe that technology has made the lives of workers easier whilst other people disagree. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 some people hold the view that machinery has made it easier for employees to do their
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 others still disagree with them. In recent times with the advent of the internet,
workers
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 tend to
work
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 from home and do a lot of research at a greater speed.
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, I vehemently agree that
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 has made it easy for those who are gainfully employed to complete their tasks on time.
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,
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 has made it possible for people to
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 from which in itself saves them the hustle of staying in traffic for over 3 to get to the office. In my
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 they can invest that time on their job.
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, during the Covid 19 pandemic, most tellers were working from home and were able to service over 1,000 customers per day
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 to the time they were working in their respective offices attending to customers physically. Despite the downsides of automation,
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, it makes it possible for employees to complete their
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 and submit it in a twinkle of an eye.
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, in recent times, it has become prevalent in most companies that
workers
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 do research using the internet within a twinkle of an eye as compared to the day-day when there was no computer and employees spent two or more days to research on a topic.
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, in 2015, was able to search for the effect of mining on the environment when I was instructed to do so by my employer in order to decide as to whether to issue an exploration licence to a company or not.
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,
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 has been helpful to
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. In conclusion, even though some people believe that
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 has made the lives of
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 easier, I strongly agree with that position.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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