Some people say that music is good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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agree
this
statement. In the follwing
paragraphs, the reasons to support my view will be outlined in detail.
It is apparent that there is no language barrier when it comes to Correct your spelling
following
music
. According to the popularity of K-Pop songs spread all over the world, there are many fans that listen and enjoy these kind
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this kind
these kinds
song
even they do not know the meaning of Fix the agreement mistake
songs
lyrics
. To Correct article usage
the lyrics
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, the concert tickets of K-Pop groups Correct your spelling
illustrate
such
as Black pink and BTC are quickly sold out in many countries like the USA, Japan and Thailand which these countries are not commonly use
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are not commonly using
are not commonly used
Korean
language as their mother tongue. Apart from that, even though some of the classical Change the article
the Korean
musics
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music
kinds of music
pieces of music
that
only comes with just the sound of Correct pronoun usage
apply
music
instruments, many Replace the word
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people
still realized the oneness of their feeling as they listen to it. Since every person can Change the verb form
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relate
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feeling, they can related
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relate
music
as well.
Moreover
, music
is a part of family reunion's culture. For example
, the festival that all family member
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members
gatering
together like Correct your spelling
gathering
new
year celebration, it is common in Thailand to Correct article usage
the new
doing
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In addition
, we usually use music
before start
any activities to break the ice among the Change the form of the verb
starting
people
that meet each other at
the Change preposition
for
firt
time. If there is no Correct your spelling
first
music
, it would be difficult for people
of different age group
to connect together.
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groups
are
used to Correct pronoun usage
that are
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the
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people
, I still believe that music
is one of the most effective ways because it helps people
forget their differences, and it also
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is also
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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- secondly
- thirdly
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- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite