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In some countries, the differences in age between parents and children are generally more significant compared to the past. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In our ever-changing world, the question still remains is whether the advantages of the noticeable
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 difference among family members nowadays outweigh the disadvantages or not. From my perspective, I opine that the drawbacks predominate the benefits and my essay will analyze both sides of
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 phenomenon. On the one hand, it is undeniable that the significant
age
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 gap between
parents
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 and
children
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 these days due to giving birth late provided
parents
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 chances to become well-prepared.
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 of conceiving at an older
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,
parents
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 would have opportunities to concentrate on developing their careers or finding permanent jobs,
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 having a high degree of financial stability. Once not being put under pressure of finance, these
parents
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 could have time to register for parental professional training courses to study about
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 and physical development of
children
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. Thereby, they are able
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to provide the most suitable and beneficial parenting approaches for their loved ones
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 as letting their
children
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 study at international schools with exclusive education systems.
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, these
children
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 are likely to be fully developed for
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.
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, giving birth when being older has its own unequivocal drawbacks in terms of serious health-
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related
 problems. Regarding mothers, conceiving at an older
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 could make women suffer from heart disease, elevated liver enzymes or even death owing to the fact that their bodies' functions deteriorate day by day. Considering
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children
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, infants born in families with remarkable
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 differences are likely to have autism or hyperactivity, which are oftentimes genetic diseases. As a consequence, a lot of expenses
as well as effort for medication
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, as well as effort for medication,
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 would be required since these hereditary illnesses are usually terminal. In conclusion, the disadvantages of
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 issue in terms of health conditions unquestionably dominate the advantages in terms of
children
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 being well developed.
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,
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 phenomenon should be addressed at the earliest convenience.
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