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Many business meetings and training are increasingly taking place online. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays, technology has been really developed really amazing
for
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recent decades. Many
people
 have their works, lessons and meetings through the Internet and apps.
Thus
 most employees are allowed to
work
 at home. I think no matter they are working at home or in the workplace, which has their own merits. I think its advantages outweigh its disadvantages. On the one hand,
people
 who are working in the companies together are more efficient and convenient. The atmosphere of hard-working in the workplace would help and encourage them to show their whole potential and be capable for their jobs, as compared to online
work
, they need to have strong self-discipline, which could finish their tasks better ,
Moreover
 communication of face to face could deal with some problems directly and
work
-efficient would be quicker.
For example
, if an item needs two
people
 or a group to address and cooperate together, in the same company, they could easily gather members together.
On the other hand
, they have a flexible timetable for their
work
, as long as they finish their tasks.
Therefore
, they could utilize the extra time to develop their hobbies, spend more time with their family’s members and relieve themselves to do some activities that they want to do.
Also
, they don’t face traffic
jam
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 when they are after
work
 and the fees of transportation are saved.
Moreover
, taking place online would solve some areas problems that
people
 lived in remote areas or abroad. In conclusion, I think that
people
 working online is convenient compared to working in the workplace.
Thus
 I think the merits outweigh the drawbacks.
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